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1、联考作文题：1.一次令你快乐的成长经历；2.你的体会和感想。审题：要点，格式，人称，时态要求：描写具体，语言生动，过程真实，语法正确。构思：快乐与成长的经历BeginningBodyEnding开头直接点题1.It’sagreatpleasureformetobeheretodayandI’llsharemygrowingexperienceherewithyou.2.Goodmorning,everyone!TodayIwanttoshareahappyexperienceinmylifewithyou..开头直接点题,语言优美4.Goodmorning,everyone!Ia
2、mveryhonoredtostandhereandshareoneofmygrowingexperiences.Tracingmygrowth,IthinknothingcouldbemoremeaningfulandenjoyablethanvolunteeringfortheUniversityStudentsSportsMeetingin2011.5.Throughoutthelifejourney,therearecountlessexperiencesaccompanyingus,eitherbrightorgrey.Theyseemtobeeye-catchingp
3、ealswhichdecoratedourgrowingsoul.StillIremembertheexperiencewhichmademehappy.Fromthenon,IfeelthatIammorematureandalwayshaveasenseofobligation.Contributionmakesmygrowthhappyandunregretful.Ireallyappreciatethisexperience.主体部分：过程真实，描写具体，过程真实，语法正确。1.Onebeautifulsunnyday,I,togetherwithsomeofmyclas
4、smates,wenttovisitthenursinghouse(敬老院)locatednotfarawayfromourschool.Wehelpedtheoldmencleanthehouseandchattedwiththem.Someclassmateswhoaregoodatsinginganddancingalsopreparedaperformancetoshowourloveandcaretothem.Seeingthebrightsmileontheirface,wefelthappyforwhatwedid,thoughwewerealittleexhaus
5、ted.（benifit）主体部分：过程真实，描写具体语法正确，语言生动3.IthappenedwhenIwas12.Atthattime,Iwastooshytospeakonewordloudinclass.Oneday,myteacheraskedstudentstosharetheirtravelexperiences.TravelismyfavoriteactivityandIhadlotsofthingstosay.Afterstrugglinginmymind,Iputupmyhandforthefirsttime.Tomysurprise,allmyclassma
6、teswereattractedbymywords.Thoughmyfacestillturnedred,IwashappywithwhatIhaveachieved.主体部分：过程真实，描写具体语法正确，语言生动4.Asa15-year-oldstudent,Iwastheyoungestamongallthevolunteers.ButIdidn’trelaxmyself.Instead,Iworkedharder.Isentumbrellastopassers-bywhenitrained.Ipassedsomepillstotravelerswhowerenotfeeli
7、ngwell.Inreturn,theysmiledtomegratefully.Tiredbuthappy,Iobtainedvaluablefriendshipandcommunicationskillswithstrangers,whichmakemegrowmature.结尾部分：总结全文，升华主题1.Itwasmyfirstvolunteerexperience,whichencouragesmetodevotemyselftomoresocialactivities.
