大学英语写作-3-What-a-Good-Sentence-Is.ppt

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1、Part3WhatIsanEffectiveSentenceThisiswherewelearntoseewhatagoodsentenceshouldbelike.Whatisagoodsentence?Agoodsentenceshouldhavethefollowingqualities:1)unity;2)coherence;3)conciseness；4)emphasis；5)variety.Unity(一致性)Aunifiedsentenceexpressesasinglecompletethought.Itdoesnotcontainideasthatarenotc

2、loselyrelated,nordoesitexpressathoughtthatisnotcompleteitself.e.g:*DuFuwasoneoftheGreatestpoets.Improved:DuFuwasoneoftheGreatestpoetsoftheTangDynastyinChina.Unity(一致性)e.g:*BorninasmalltowninSouthChinaintheearly50s,hegrewuptobeafamousmusician.Improved:HewasborninasmalltowninSouthChinaintheearly5

3、0s,Inhischildhoodhelikedtosingsongs.Laterheenteredaconservatory(音乐学校).Inthe70s,hebecameafamousmusician.Improved:Althoughhewasborninasmalltown,hegrewuptobeafamousmusician.Coherence(连贯性)Coherencemeansclearandreasonableconnectionsbetweenparts.Itisnotcoherentifithasfaultyparallelconstructions,dangl

4、ingormisplacedmodifiers,pronounswithambiguousreference,confusingshiftinpersonandnumber,orvoice,tense,andmood.e.g：*DuFuwasoneoftheGreatestpoets.Improved:DuFuwasoneoftheGreatestpoetsoftheTangDynastyinChina.Coherence(连贯性)faultyparallelconstructionse.g：*Amanisjudgednotonlybywhathesaysbutalsobyhisde

5、eds.Revised:1)Amanisjudgednotonlybywhathesaysbutalsobywhathedoes.2)Amanisjudgednotonlybyhiswordsbutalsobyhisdeeds.Coherence(连贯性)faultyparallelconstructionse.g：*Wethoughtshewascharming,intelligentandaverycapableyoungwomen.Revised:1)Wethoughtshewascharming,intelligentandverycapable.2)Wethoughtshe

6、wasacharming,intelligentandverycapableyoungwoman.Coherence(连贯性)faultyparallelconstructionse.g：*Wehavegreatfaithandhighhopesforher.Revised:Wehavegreatfaithinandhighhopesforher.Coherence(连贯性)pronounwithambiguousreferencee.g：*Shetoldmysisterthatshewaswrong.Revised:1)"I'mwrong,"shesaidtomysister.2)

7、Sheadmittedthatshewaswrongandsaidtomysister.3)"Youwerewrong,"shesaidtomysister.4)Mysisterwastoldthatshewaswrong.Coherence(连贯性)pronounwithambiguousreferencee.g：*Hewasknockeddownbyabike,butitwasnotserious.Revised:1)Hewasknockeddownb