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1、作文评析Part-timeJobs观点对比型BYgroup4主讲：CalvinYangEvaluationonly.CreatedwithAspose.Slidesfor.NET3.5ClientProfile5.2.0.0.Copyright2004-2011AsposePtyLtd.行文流程1.描述现象在现实生活中大致反映，引出全文2.正（反）观点的对比论述3.我的观点Evaluationonly.CreatedwithAspose.Slidesfor.NET3.5ClientProfile5.2.0.0.Copyright

2、2004-2011AsposePtyLtd.行文中出现的主要问题1.文章主要以短句为主，让文章显得逻辑连接性不强2.语句、段落之间关联度不够，逻辑性不强3.chiglish较为严重，书面语、口语分不清楚4.模板问题比较严重，主要都选择一个模板Evaluationonly.CreatedwithAspose.Slidesfor.NET3.5ClientProfile5.2.0.0.Copyright2004-2011AsposePtyLtd.行文中的普遍问题1.think一词的乱用2.moreandmore（万恶词组）3.单词多次

3、重复出现，没有替换4.没有标点符号，不分大小写5.单复数问题6.语法不清楚7.句法不清楚Evaluationonly.CreatedwithAspose.Slidesfor.NET3.5ClientProfile5.2.0.0.Copyright2004-2011AsposePtyLtd.SolutionNO.1（mainproblem）文章行文中应长短句结合搭配，抑扬顿挫，这样会使得改卷老师认为你的英语水平较高，同时文章的层次就出来了e.g.Mostofushaveformedanunrealisticpictureoflif

4、eonadesertisland.Wesometimesimagineadesertislandtobeasortofparadisewherethesunalwaysshines.Lifethereissimpleandgood.Ripefruitfallsfromthetreesandyouneverhavetowork.Theothersideofthepictureisquitetheopposite.Lifeonadesertislandiswretched.Youeitherstarvetodeathorliveli

5、keRobinsonCrusoe,waitingforaboatwhichnevercomes.Perhapsthereisanelementoftruthinboththesepictures,butfewofushavehadtheopportunitytofindout.------Newconcept3Lesson12LifeonadesertislandEvaluationonly.CreatedwithAspose.Slidesfor.NET3.5ClientProfile5.2.0.0.Copyright2004-

6、2011AsposePtyLtd.Summery模板;结构：总-分（正面-过度-反面）-总总;….haveformeddifferentideas/opinionson分：…someholdthat…(用词：maintain,view,beconvinced…)列举原因：…forthesimplereasonthat…Theotherperspectiveisquitetheopposite.Theyarguethat…..Accordingtothem…(what’smore,inaddition,moreover…)总：Pe

7、rhapsthereisanelementoftruthinboththeseopinions,1.     butIwouldmaintainamoderate/neutralattitude…2.     butIwouldagreemoreontheformer/latterone…Evaluationonly.CreatedwithAspose.Slidesfor.NET3.5ClientProfile5.2.0.0.Copyright2004-2011AsposePtyLtd.exampleTheyhaveformed

8、differentideasonthistopic.Someholdthatchildrenaresupposedtodosoforthesimplereasonthatinchildhoodtheygetgoodmemoryandthatearlystudyc