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《安徽省巢湖市春晖中学2020届高考英语 考前冲刺精品讲义外教旁批写作外教旁批写作 (6)》由会员上传分享,免费在线阅读,更多相关内容在教育资源-天天文库。
1、安徽省巢湖市春晖中学2020届高考英语考前冲刺精品讲义外教旁批写作(七)典例请根据以下要点,适当发挥,写一篇不少于120词的英语说明文。标题:ShoppingontheInternet(网上购物)要点:1.网上购物已很普遍;2.网上购物的好处;3.网上购物的缺点。【写作策略】1.仔细审题:(1)体裁:提纲式作文(2)时态:一般现在时(3)人称:第三人称。2.确定结构:(1)概括网上购物现状—普遍。(2)文章主体:——网上购物的好处与缺点。3.筛选词汇:(shopping,advantages,ontheInternet,withthedevel
2、opmentof等)4.句型搜索:(Alltheyneedtodois...;Thefirst...isthat...等。)5.组句成篇:(常用Thefirst,thesecond等。)【范文赏析】ShoppingontheInternet①WiththedevelopmentoftheInternetandthepopularizationofcomputers,shoppingontheInternethasbecomemoreandmorecommoninourdailylife.ShoppingontheInternethasaloto
3、fadvantages,②ofwhichthemostimportantisperhapsitsconvenience.③Peopledon’thavetowastealotoftheirenergyandprecioustimetogofromoneshoptoanothertochoosethecommoditiestheylike.Thisisespeciallydesirabletotheold,thesickandthebusypeoplewhocannotgototheshopsinperson.④Alltheyneedtodois
4、tositinfrontofthecomputerandclickthemouse.⑤Thegoodstheyorderwillbedeliveredtothemimmediately.⑥However,shoppingontheInternetalsohasitsdisadvantages.⑦Thefirstdisadvantageisthattheconsumerscannotseethegoodsortrythemoninperson.Sometimes,therealgoodsmaynotbethesameaswhathavebeens
5、eenonthecomputer.⑧TheseconddisadvantageisthatsomeshopsontheInternetarenotregistered.Theywillneverdeliveranythingtoyouaftertheygetthemoneyfromyou.Oncecheated,youwillfindthatyouhavenowheretogotocomplain.【名师点评】★①开篇引出话题,比较级的叠用表明网上购物的发展趋势。★②非限制性定语从句,增强句与句之间的连贯性。★④⑤强调进一步网上购物方便的特点。
6、★⑥从内容上转折,过渡到论述网上购物的缺点。★⑦⑧分别论述网购的缺点。★总体评价:文章结构清晰,层次分明,内容丰富真实。最后,若再加总结性语言,则文章更加完美。【写作指导】Elegance(优雅)(原文)Soso(普通)(1)ShoppingontheInternethasalotofadvantages,ofwhichthemostimportantisperhapsitsconvenience.ShoppingontheInternethasalotofadvantagesandoneofthemisperhapsitsconvenienc
7、e.(2)Thisisespeciallydesirabletotheold,thes
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