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1、201706浙江续写作文讲评Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac'sbike,tear
2、ingopenhistenthag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追赶).Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoshowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupan
3、dthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheir waytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwo cyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater, theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsidea
4、manonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Para1:
5、Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Para2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.TheprovidedbeginningsPara1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Para2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.结伴骑行---独自遇狼---Para1：Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Whosec
6、arwasit?Whydiditstop?HowdidMacfeel?WhatwouldMacdo?Para2：Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Whatdidtheysee?Whatwouldtheydo?卷面；段落，字数；衔接（与首句；两段之间；句子之间）故事发展准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；符合情景否？）改卷经验出现的问题衔接（与首句；两段之间；句子之间）故事发展准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；符合情景否？）出现的问题衔接（与首句；两段之间；句子之
7、间）故事发展童话式的寓言式的无厘头式的戏剧式的出现的问题准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；符合情景否？）1afraid;nervous;frightened2catch,catchup,catchupwith3“Getintothecarquickly,man!”saidPaul.4发动汽车5狼追我们6汽油不够7自行车上跳下8call?/callfor?thepolice出现的问题准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；符合情景否？）Hesawthewolf’sfacenearhim.Heusedhisfisthitt
8、hefaceofthewolfstrongly.Seeingthewolf’sfacesoclosetohim,hehititwithallhisstrength/heavilyusinghisfist.出现的问题准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；符合情景否？）基本语法错误不规则动词（P106）though/but dangerous/indangerthanksto/thanks出现的问题准确性（用词；句子结构；语法；符合情景否
