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1、.Everyyearseverallanguagesdieout.Somepeoplethinkthatthisisnotimportantbecauselifewillbeeasieriftherearefewerlanguagesintheworld.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagreewiththisopinion? Languagesarecomplicatedandcharming,representingtheuniquecultureofsomeregionandco

2、untry[c1].Everyyearsee[c2]severallanguagesdyingout,yetwecannot[c3]definethatabadthing. Let’s[c4]beginwiththinking[c5]themeaningofalanguage.Language[c6]shouldprovidepeoplewiththefunctionofdailyuse.Whenacertainlanguagediesout,wearesurethatpeoplewhousedtouseit

3、musthavefoundanalternativeusefullanguage.Itiswisetoabandonauselesstool.Aslongastheycanfinishcommunicationtask[c7]successfully,itdoesnotmatterevenifitdirectlyleadstoalanguagedyingout.Peoplehavenoreasontoprotectanendangeredlanguagemerelyforthediversity’ssake.

4、[c8]Namely,ifsome[c9]languageisuseful,itwillneverfadeaway.Therefore,thedyingoutprocessispartofthenature’schoices. Therearesomanyadvantagesoffewerlanguages.Firstisvalidunderstandingbetweencountries.Itisapeacestarttosharesomelanguage,fromwhichpeopleinbothcoun

5、trieswillcommunicatemoreeffectivelysoconfusionwillvanish.Besides,increasingtravelandbusinesscooperationwilltakeplace.Asthey[c10]sharethelanguageanddifferentculture,morepeoplewillbewillingtotravelthere.Bothsides’companiescancommunicatemoreeasily,moreresource

6、swillbeshared.Fewerlanguageswillhelpbenefiteconomyinwayofcommerceandtourismindustry. Bywayofconclusion,Iwanttoreaffirmmyposition.Althoughwehatetoseesomelanguagesdyingout,weshouldcheerfortheadvantagesitbroughttotheworld.范文..  注释：[c1]Someregionsandcountries，前

7、面languages用了复数后面要记得统一。 [c2]Sees [c3]cannot [c4]注意文章是议论文不是演讲稿，用let’s这不合适 [c5]thinkingabout [c6]Alanguage.你上句话刚写了themeaningofalanguage,后面要记得对应。 [c7]Tasks [c8]这句话差连接词和前面一句接起来 [c9]a，泛指的时候建议用a,some容易引起歧义 [c10]They指的是谁？ 评分详情：Total：(5.5+5.5+6+6.5)/4=6 Taskresponse

8、5.5分1.presentaclearposition第一段已经明确提出立场2.mainideasmaybeunclear由于衔接上的问题，第二段的论证有些混乱。第三段第二个点不太明白你的意思是什么。你的点是increasingtravelandbusinesscooperationwilltakeplace.更多的人会出去旅游，同时商业合作也会增长？如果是的话，这个点里面是两个分点还是一个点？另外