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1、2011年6月英语四级真题与答案详解PartIWriting 规范版 DoingShoppingOnline WiththedevelopmentoftheInternet,shoppingisnolongeratiringthing.Justclickyourmousetochoosethearticlesyoulike,andthepurchaseisdone.Youdon’tevenhavetostepoutoftheroom.Itseemsalleasyandquick. However,people’sopinionsvaryonthistrend.So
2、mebelievethatonlineshoppingistimeandmoneysaving.Withplentifulselectionoptions,theycanbuywhatevertheylikeatanytimeconvenient.Stillothersinsistthatmis-purchasingaloneisannoyingenough,nottomentionthecredibilityofthesellersandthesafetyoftheiraccounts. Inmyopinion,theconvenienceandexcitemento
3、fonlineshoppingisbeyondalldoubts.Inthemeantime,wemustalwaysbearinmindthatcertaintrapsdoexist,sowe’dbettermakesurethesellersaretrustworthybeforebuying.Inaddition,weshouldalsoguardourselvesfromthepotentialhackerswhomightstealouraccountinformation. 文章点评: 这是一篇“中等偏上”的学生作文。本文先对网购热潮进行简介,引出全篇;接
4、着对网络购物的正反两方面进行对比;最后提出自己的看法结束全篇。整体看思路清晰,逻辑严密,行文流畅,用语较为地道。 下面说一下这篇文章的有待提高之处: 1.文章结构上,能看得出该同学试图采用议论文的“三段式”(提出问题、分析问题、解决问题)。但是,以“WiththedevelopmentoftheInternet”为开首语,有些落入俗套,有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加注意,应该能写出更好的句子。 2.微观语言点方面,有些语句稍显啰嗦,比如Withplentifulselectionoptions…简化成Withplentifulselections…更好,意思没有丝毫减损,表
5、达力反而增强许多; 高分版 Withthehelpoftheeverrapiddevelopmentofinternettechnology,onlineshoppingiscomingintofashioninmostofcities. Onlineshoppingiswelcomedbymostpeopleduetovariousreasons.Fromtheperspectiveofconsumer,itcansavesometimeforpeoplewhodon’thavemuchsparetime.Justclickthemouse,theycangetw
6、hatevertheywantwhilestayingathome.Fortheretailers,itcancutsomecostsforthosewhodon’thavemuchcirculatingfunds.Theydon’thavetorentahouseandspendmoneyonemployeescomparedwiththetraditionaltrademode.However,therearestillsomedefectsinonlineshopping.First,laceoffacetofacedealmakesonlineshoppingle
7、ssreliableandtrustworthy.Second,peoplewilllosethefunofbargain. Itisundeniablethatshoppingontheinternethasbecomeanirresistibletrendinmodernsociety.It’sofgreaturgencythatweneedtoregulatetherelativelawsaccordancewiththerapidgrowthofonlineshopping.Onlyinthiswaycanweenj
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