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1、雅思教父刘洪波：犯罪类雅思作文高分范文及点评雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品《最简化雅思写作》8月光芒上市从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想完全应对官方四大评分标准最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐Puttingcriminalsintoprisonsisnotaneffectivewaytodealwiththem.Instead,educationandjobtrainingshouldbeoffered.Towhat

2、extentdoyouagreeordisagree?Howtohandlecriminalsisaproblemthatallcountriesandsocietiesface.Traditionally,theapproachhasbeentopunishthembyplacingtheminprisonstopayforwhattheyhavedone.Some,however,advocatefortryingtomakethembetterwithtrainingandeducationa

3、nditseemstheymayhaveagoodpoint.Firstofall,considerallthemoneythatwehavetospendtolockpeopleupinjail.Itdoesn’tseemlikeagooduseofpublicmoneyifthepeopledon’tactuallygetanybetter.Becausemostcriminalseventuallyareletoutofprison,ourfocusshouldbeonmakingthembe

4、ttercitizens.Infact,thereasonwhymanypeopleendupinjailinthefirstplaceisbecausetheydidn’thaveagoodeducationorhappyfamily.Soiftheycanlearnjobskillstheyperhapscanfindworkandfeeltheycancontributeinapositiveway.Iftheydothis,theywon’tneedcrime.Surlyeveryonede

5、servesasecondchance.Ofcoursethisdoesnotmeanthatweshouldbetoolenientoncriminals.Thosewhocommitcrimeshouldstillbepunished,butduringtheirpunishmenttheyshouldalsobetreated.Ifwemakeaninvestmentinthemandshowcompassion,mostwillbeabletomakeanewstart.Tosummariz

6、e,wemustmakemoreofanefforttogototherootoftheproblem.Weneedtotreatcriminalsaspatientsandgivethemthemedicinetheyneed:educationandtraining.Bygivingpeopletheskillsforasecondchancewecanmakeoursocietysaferandhealthier.(271words)Harvey点评：写作线索：首段，赞同题目观点；第二段，罪犯

7、在监狱里什么都不做是花着纳税人的钱的；第三段，没有接受教育和不幸的家庭是原因，要教育，要给他们机会；第四段；当然要惩罚，但惩罚和治疗并用。末段总结。好文章。末段第二句的比喻给本文增色不少，：Weneedtotreatcriminalsaspatientsandgivethemthemedicinetheyneed:educationandtraining.十分贴切。先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用词汇Punishvt.惩罚，处罚Advocatevt.提倡jailn.监狱=

8、prisonlenientadj.宽大的，仁慈的compassionn.同情patientn.病人短语injail监禁endup最后结果commitcrime犯罪makeaninvestmentin…投资于makeanefforttodo努力去做三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子lInfact,thereasonwhymanypeopleendupinjailinthefirstplaceisbecausetheydidn’thaveagoodeducationor