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1、秋风清，秋月明,落叶聚还散,寒鸦栖复惊。儿童类雅思作文高分范文及点评——摘自刘洪波2010新作《最简化雅思写作》Somepeoplebelievethattimespentontelevision,videoandcomputergamescanbebeneficialtochildren.Othersbelievethishasnegativeeffectsonachild.Discussbothviewsandgiveyourownopinion.Inrecentyearsparentshavehadtomaketoughdeci
2、sionsabouthowmuchtimetheirkidsshouldspendwatchingTVandplayingcomputerorvideogames.Somehavearguedthattheyarenotonlyawasteoftime,butpotentiallyharmful.Others,however,claimthatkidsshouldbekidsanddeservesomeentertainment.Personally,Ifeelthatthebestapproachismoderation.Onthe
3、onehand,toomuchTVandgamingcanhaveanegativeinfluence.Physically,hoursinfrontofamonitorareharmfulontheeyes.Andmentallyifkidsspendtoomuchtimelivinginavirtualworld,theymaylosetheabilitytomakefriendsandsocializeinanormalway.Moreover,seeingtoomuchviolenceandquestionableconten
4、tcouldinfluenceyoungpeople’sbehavior,astheyareimpressionable.Ontheotherhand,allchildrenneedtohavefunandplay.Ifstudentsonlystudy,theywillsurelysufferfrommentalandemotionalpressureandstress.Also,notallcontentonTVoronlineisunhealthy;therearelotsofeducationalshowsandcontent
5、thatispositive.Speakingfrompersonalexperience,Ithinktherightapproachistohaveahealthybalance.Inthisregard,parentshavearesponsibilitytosetboundariesandmakesurethatthecontenttheirkidsareviewingisappropriate.Aswell,TVandvideogamesarenottheonlywaystohavefun,soparentsshoulden
6、couragetheirkidstointeractandplaywithotherkidsinpersontoo.Intheend,weshouldfollowourcommonsense.ParentsshouldbefirmbutfairwithlettingtheirkidsplayonlineorinfrontofaTVscreen.Mostthingsinmoderationarehealthy,andTVandvideogamesarenodifferent.(289words)刘洪波点评：写作线索：观点中立，适度即可。
7、第二段ontheonehand，讲负面；第三段ontheotherhand，讲正面；最后讲家长要重视和起作用。经典的中立型文章。可学习的点很多：首先，首段最后一句中Thebestapproachismoderation.（最好的办法是适度）moderation一词可以理解为中文的“（把握）火候”，是中立文章的点睛大词，不可不学。其次，第二段中分别用physically和mentally拓展了写作思路；最后，文章末句提升至哲学高度：Mostthingsinmoderationarehealthy,TVandvideogamesareno
8、different.（大多数事情适度都是好的，电视和视频游戏也不例外）是啊，适度饮酒对身体好；打打小麻将，买买彩票还怡情呢。但最难把握的就是这个moderation“度”啊！先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它
