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1、作文中考英语写作技巧静安初中培训机构新王牌角色大反转一一我当老师评作文作文点评体验：我评我优秀！找回更加优秀的自己!BYZhangChenWhat'syourviewonsettingofffirecrackersIt'satraditionactivityfortheChinesetosetofffirecrackersonNewYear'seve・EverytimeIamexcitingedtoseethebeautifulfirecrackers.Soasthelasttime.[Icouldn'tconcealmyexcitementatthesightofthe

2、beautifulfirecrackers.]However,moreandmorepeopleareagainstsettingofffirecrackersbecauseoftheseriousairpollution.Itcausesmanyhealthproblemandpeoplehavetowearbreathingmaskwhentheygoout・Iagreewiththem・Althoughfirecrackersarecharming,[Comparedwiththecharmingfirecrackers,]theenvironmentismorei

3、mportanttous.Ihopethegovernmentmustmakesomerulesaboutsettingofffirecrackersassoonaspossible・Wemayalsofindwaystocreateenvironmentallyfriendlyfirecrackers.文章条理比较清晰，结尾的提议很好。部分句子表达有误，耍作修改。ByZhangAoWhat'sYourViewonSettingoffFirecrackersSettingofffirecrackers—oneofthemostfamousChinesetraditiona

4、lcustoms,alwaysbringsmelotsofmarvelousmemorieswhentheSpringFestivaliscoming.AsfarasIamconcerned,althoughitisnoisytosetofffirecrackers,thesoundstillmakesmehappyandexcited・[Despitethenoise,thesoundofthefirecrakersgivesusagreatdealofexcitementandhappiness.]Butinmyopinion,nowadays,settingofff

5、irecrackersisharmfultotheenvironmentasitwillreleaseplentyofcarbondioxideandothergaswhichdoharmtotheatmosphereandmaketheairpollutionmoreandmoreserious,[worsentheairpollution.]Ihopewecanfinda'green'waytocelebratetheSpriFestivalbecausewehaveonlyoneearth.(103words)内容很详细，既有口己认同的方面，也提出了存在的问题，最后

6、给出的建议也与环保话题息息相关。句式丰富，但还可以作些调整让句子表达更地道。ByWuJiaxinWhat'sYourViewonSettingoffFirecrackersIt'scommonknowledgethatfirecrackersareindispensableinSpringFestival,lastyearwasnoexception・Inmyopinion,thisChinesecustomcanbringmealotofhappiness.However,thiscustomstillhassomedisadvantages・Firstandforem

7、ost,ifwesetofftoomanyfirecrackers,theenvironmentwillbepollutedsothatwecan'tbreathefreshair.Moreover,somepeoplearesettingofffirecrackerswhileothersaresleeping.ItMreallymakespeoplenervous・Lastbutnotleast,settingoffthemisexactlydangerous.Everyyearmanypeopleareinjuredbe