1、怎样使句子简练利落（转载）怎样使句子简练利落● 陈清霖 不是所有的长句都是罗唆的，也不是凡是短的句子都是洗练的。我们要尽量运用简练的句子；我们也要尽量把没有增添语意的词语去掉，并且将冗长句子节缩，使之简练利落。 我们可以从四方面着手：一、消除多余的词语 每句话里的词藻或用语，如果对语意起不了作用就不要铺张，要给以铲除，因此(1)a-(7)a都嫌唠叨，要由(1)b-(7)b来取代： (1)a. At this point of time→b. Now (2)a. Bring all this to a conc
2、lusion.→b. Concluding this. (3)a. Has a tendency to drop→b. Can drop easily. (4)a. On account of the fact that...→b. As.../Since... (5)a. Situated in the vicinity of...→b. near... (6)a. June was detemined in her mind to ...→b. June was determind to .../June
3、decided to ... (7)a. Here comes David, a person whom I idolise and for whom I have the greatest admiration.→b. Here comes David,a person I idolise./Here comes my idol, David.二、避免不必要的重复 重复重要的字眼是种修辞手段，但是不必要或无目的的重复，却使句子累赘不自然，因此(8)a-(12)a要改为(8)b-(12)b: (8)a. Clos
4、e proximity→b. Proximity (9)a. Cooperate together→b. Cooperate/work together (10)a. Most unique→b. unique (11)a. The patient in Ward 2 is a mentally ill man.→b. The patient in Ward 2 is mentally ill. (12)a. A good teacher helps each student to become a bette
5、r student, both academically and mentally.→b. A good teacher helps each student to grow. /develop academically and mentally.三、简化句子结构 句子结构务必明确易解，如果出现不必要的迂回状况，便要纠正加以简化，而且尽量采用恰当的动词，臻达这目的；因此(13)a-(14)a要改为(13)b-(14)b: (13)a. Rarely should a doctor give a patient an
6、 estimate of how many months or years he or she will live.→b.Rarely should a doctor estimate/predict how long a patient will live. (14)a. The manager is responsible for monitoring and balancing the annual budget for all expenses.→b. The manager monitors and bal
7、ances the annual budget.四、将从句节缩为短语、短语简化为单词 英语从句和短语，特别是修饰性质者，可以简而略之，但语意不变，如(15)a和(16)a都可节缩为(15)b和(16)b: (15)a. The oral approach,which is a method of language teaching,is effective for teaching oral communication.→b. The oral approach, a method of language teac
8、hing, is effective for teaching oral communication. (16)a. Janet's jacket, made of cotton, is too warm for hot weather here.→b. Janet's cotton jacket, is too warm fo
