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1、PartIWriting 【标准版】 TheWaytoSuccess Successissomethingeveryonelooksfor,longsforanddiesfor.Buthaveyoueverconsideredwhatsuccessis?Somemayholdthatsuccessmeansonehasbeautifullife,likeprettyhouse,coolcarsandgreatpower.It’sindeedonewaytodefinesuccess.Buttome,successisdoingsomethingonere
2、allyfeelslikedoing. Toachievethiskindofsuccess,onehastobearinmindthreeessentialprerequisites,namelyknowingwhereyourinterestreallyliesin,possessingthestrongwilltopursueyourinterestandhavingthediligencetorealizeyourdream.Inotherwords,theyare“what”“why”and“how”ofsuccess.It’sreallyluck
3、ilygoodforone,especiallyfortheyoungergenerationoftodaytofindtheirdreams,followthemandintheend,makethemcometrueandbecomesuccessful. Althoughit’snevereasytosucceed,progressingwiththestrongwillanddiligencetowardstherightdirection,you’llbetheone! 【作文解析】 这是一篇议论文。作者首先提出问题”whatissuccess
4、?”,但并没有在这个问题上着更多的笔墨,而是直接引出了自己的观点:successisdoingsomethingonereallyfeelslikedoing.算是立意较为新颖的地方。随后在第二段对这种成功背后的三种必要条件做出了阐述。整体看,行文流畅,用语规范地道。 本篇亮点: 1.排比词组或句子的运用: Successissomethingeveryonelooksfor,longsforanddiesfor. …namely,knowingwhereyourinterestreallyliesin,possessingthestrongwillt
5、opursueyourinterestandhavingthediligencetorealizeyourdream. 2.bearinmind 3.liein 4.strongwilltopursueyourinterest 本文有待提高之处: 1.文中人称有些混乱。有些使用第二人称代指读者,有些又以第三人称指代,建议统一。 2.结构上,一般情况下我们建议考生使用典型的“三段式”,即,提出问题、分析问题、解决问题。该作者基本上遵循了这个原则,但第三段更多的却是重复了第二段的中心思想,并没有起到很好的总结作用。如果第三段,作者可以与第一段的“成功定
6、义”相呼应,例如:即使没有这些身外之物,但心灵上的满足,梦想的实现,才是我心中成功的本质。 整体看,文章在语言表达和立意上还不错。但在文章结构上有些松散,有待提高。 【高分版】 TheWaytoSuccessFirstessay—streamofthoughttype TheWaytoSuccess "Geniusisonepercentinspirationandninety-ninepercentperspiration."Andherecomesourquestion,whatisthewaytosuccess? Astrongwilland
7、greateffortsarethemostessentialtwokeystothedoorofsuccess. Whydopeoplefailtoachievetheirgoal?Thereasonisthatmostofthemgiveuphalfwayduetotheirlackofastrongwilloncetheyencounteranydifficulty.Amanofastrongwillalwaysstickstohiscausenomatterhowtoughitmightbe. WouldThomasEdisonbesuchagre
8、atmaninhistoryifheh
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