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1、Unit3PARTIIFOCUSConcisenessSuggestedanswerstotheexercisea.Redundancymayresultwhenmodifiersareusedthatdonotaddtothemeaningofthesentence.Poorwereallyneedtolistentowanthewouldsay.Betterweneedtolistentowhathewouldsay.Moreexamples:PoorIwassimplytootiredtocleanthehouseafterworkingforawhol
2、eday.BetterIwastootiredtocleanthehouseafterworkingforawholeday.b.Redundancymayoccurfromredundantphasing(i.e.spellingoutthemeaningofawordorphrasethatcanandshouldstandalone).PoorThecriticismsIwillmakearemajoroneswhichoughttobegivencarefulconsiderationbecauseoftheirimportant.BetterThec
3、riticismsIwillmakearemajorones.Moreexamples:PoorOvertheyears,shebecausesuspiciousthatshewasbeingexploitedbypeoplewhowantedtotakeadvantageofheranduseher.BetterOvertheyears,shebecamesuspiciousthatshewasbeingexploited.a.Redundancymayresultifthewriterfailstousepronounsinreferencetoprevi
4、ousnounphrases.PoorThevolunteersinthefiredepartmentalotofcredit.Thevolunteerfiremenansweralarmsanytimeinallkindsofweather.BetterThevolunteerfiremendeservealotofcreditbecausetheyansweralarmsanytimeinallkindsofweather.Moreexamples:PoorInlargecitiesschoolteachersareusuallypaidhigherwag
5、esthantheteachersofaschoolinasmalltown.BetterInlargecitiesschoolteachersareusuallypaidhigherwagesthanthoseinasmallertown.b.Redundancymayoccurwhenwordsorphrasesareawkwardlyinsertedratherthanimplied.PoorOneofthemostdifficultdecisionsIhaveevermadeinmylifewaswhetherIshouldgotouniversity
6、afterfinishinghighschoolornottogocollegeafterhighschool.BetterOneofthemostdifficultdecisionsIhaveevermadewaswhetherornottogotocollegeafterhighschool.Moreexamples:PoorFudanUniversityisaverygooduniversitybecauseofmanydistinguishedprofessorsteachingthere.BetterFudanUniversityisagooduni
7、versitybecauseofitsdistinguishedfaculty.a.Redundancymayresultwhenrelatedideasarestatedinmorethanonesentence.Tosolvethisproblem,itisoftenadvisabletocombinesentencesintoone.PoorPeoplewhobothworkfulltimeandgotoschoolhavealotofproblems.Thesepeopledon’thavemuchtimeforrecreation.Oftenthey
8、liveundermorepressu
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