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1、09英教2班陈钦1号ThebenefitsofvolunteeringToday,moreandmorepeopleintheworldtakepartinvolunteering.It’sverymeaningfulandwonderful.Inmyopinion,wecangainalotfromtheactivity.First,wecanhelpotherswhoareintrouble.Wecaninteractandunderstandbetterwitheachother建议改为interactwithandunderstandeachotherbetter..The
2、smilesofthepeoplecanmakeusfeelhappyandencourageusinreturn.Second,wecanhaveabetterunderstandingoftheworld,forexample,theearth,animals,environmentandsoon.Alotofknowledgecanbegainedinourmind.Third,duringvolunteering,wecanacquiremuchexperience.Wecanopenourheartheartswhencommunicatingwithothers.Wec
3、anhandlethedifficultiesbetterandmoreeffective这里应该用副词effectively.Ofcourse,wecangainalotmorebesidesthebenefitsmentionedabove语义不明,句法错误。建议改为benefitswhatarementionedabove.Ontheotherhand,italsocanItcanalsobringbenefitstoothers.So,let’sgotobeavolunteer.点评:本文条理比较清楚,观点明确,论述遵循总—分—总结构。不足之处是句与句之间的衔接不是很紧密,
4、另外要注意遣词造句,有少量语法错误,应该尽量避免。点评者:09英教1班黄晓敏
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