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《安徽省巢湖市春晖中学2020届高考英语 考前冲刺精品讲义外教旁批写作外教旁批写作 (4)》由会员上传分享,免费在线阅读,更多相关内容在教育资源-天天文库。
1、安徽省巢湖市春晖中学2020届高考英语考前冲刺精品讲义外教旁批写作(五)典例请描述下面的漫画,讨论其含义,并表达你自己的观点。词数不少于120。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
2、________________________________【写作策略】1.仔细审题:(1)体裁:漫画。(2)时态:一般现在时。(3)人称:第三人称。2.确定结构:(1)简要描述图画。(2)解读现象,分析原因。(3)表达个人观点,提出解决问题的措施。3.筛选词汇:(countryside,poor,education,homework等。)4.句型搜索:(Thepicturesshowthat...;bebusywith;Asweknow等。)5.组句成篇:(therefore,so,but)【学生习作
3、】Thepicturesshowusthat①countrysidechildrenaretoopoortogotoschool.Incitiesmanychildrenwishthattheydidn’tgotoschoolanymorebecause②theyhavetoomuchhomework.③ThisistheeducationprobleminChina.Theeducationopportunityisnotequalindifferentplaces.Insomebigcities,chi
4、ldrenareverybusywiththeirlessonsinordertogotofirstclasscolleges.Theyaretired.④Theirfamilieshavealotofmoneyandwillsendthemtogoodcolleges.⑤Butinthecountryside,moneyisalittle.Therefore,manychildrencan’tgotoseniormiddleschool,⑥ofcourse,notcollege.SotheChineseg
5、overnmentshouldhelpthepoorpeopleandbuildmoreschoolsinthecountryside.⑦Childreninthecityshouldnotpaytoomuchattentiontohomeworkorscores.【名师点评】★语言及内容过于直白,平实;①可改为“countrysidefamiliescan’taffordschool...★②可改为:theburdenoftheschoolworkandfamilyexpectationistoomuch
6、forthem.★③典型的汉语思维方式,且态度略显消极。可修改为:Asweknow,oureducationsystemisnotyetideal.★④⑤⑥将条件好坏等同于钱的多少,容易引起拜金主义,价值观导向错误。④⑤可修改为:Insomerichcities,studentsarebusywiththeirstudiesatexpensiveprivateschoolswhileinthecountrysidemanychildrencan’tgotoseniormiddleschool,letalon
7、ecollege.★⑥汉语思维运用,可修改为:manychildrencan’tgotoseniormiddleschool,letalonethecollege.★⑦内容不合理。修改为:Studentsinthecitiesareallowedtohavelessworkload.★总体评价:本文总体上汉语思维运用过多,文章连贯性不够,且最后缺少总结性语言,但是没有明显地语法错
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