Unit2写作讲评2

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1、Unit2写作讲评TheTrafficinBeijingI.题目：现今，生活在北京这个大都市，人们可以享受很交通方面的便利，同时也受到很多交通问题的困扰。请根据以下内容要点，写一篇短文，陈述北京交通状况，并针对其中一个问题，提出建议：便利条件存在问题1.公交车费低1.高峰时间交通拥堵2.地铁四通八达，方便快捷2.私家车过多，空气污染严重3.……3.……II．LayoutI.GeneralintroductiontothetrafficinBeijing.II.Convenience/advantage:……(convenienttaxiservices)III.Problems/disadva

2、ntages:……Solution:takepublictransportinsteadofprivatecarslowpriceofbusfareshighlydevelopedsubwaytrafficjamsinrushhourstoomanyprivatecars,airpollution(trafficaccidents)问题---结构少主题句句子繁复，不够简洁少要点（不添加要点，不提建议）Firstly,secondly...finally太过生硬，不流畅自己增添的要点不合理。如：Studentscanenjoyaspecialdiscountinbusticketprice.Oi

3、lpricehasbeengoinguprecently.Goodpublictransportsystemhelpsalotinourdailylife.问题---结构建议太过笼统，不具体。E.g.Weshoulddosomethingtoreducethetrafficjams.Thegovernmentshouldthinkofwaystosolvetheproblem.建议最好放在最后一段来写。CorrectthemistakesYoucangotoeverywhereyouwantbysubway.ThebusfareinBeijingismuchcheaperthanmanyoth

4、ercities.Trafficaccidentshavegoneupathighspeed.There’remanythingsneedtobeimproved.Correctthemistakes生造词会，令人费解Andit'sverydangerousifyougetintoadarktaxi.illegaltaxiataxiwhichdoesn'thaveabusinesspermitATip：可以用被动语态Morehighwayscanbeconstructed.Moreoverpassescanbebuiltformorevehiclestotravelatthesametime.

5、Schoolbusescanbeprovided,sothatthenumberofprivatecarscanbereduced,especiallyinrushhours.☆每段主题句应涵盖全段中心内容Useofwords:convenientThehighlydevelopedsubwaysmakepeopleconvenient.→…makeitconvenientforpeople.翻译：明天下午4点你方便吗？Willfouro’clocktomorrowbeconvenientforyou?☆VersionLivinginBeijing,Peoplecanenjoyvarioust

6、rafficconveniences.Butatthesametime,alotofproblemshavealsobeenbroughtabout.TherearemanypositivepointsaboutBeijing’straffic.Firstofall,thebusfareischeapandeveryonecanaffordit.Besides,therailconstructionisdevelopingsofastthatitismoreconvenientforpeopletogettotheirdestinations.Also,theoverpassesarewell

7、-designed,whichhelpstocuttheriskofroadaccidents.However,therearemanythingswhichcouldbeimproved.Themainproblemisthetrafficjamsinrushhours.Itmakespeoplestressedoutbecausetheyareoftenlateforschoolorwork.