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1、EnglishPartner雅思作文修改TR6.0Answerallpartsofthetask5addressesthetaskonlypartially;theformatmaybeinappropriateinplacesPresent aclearpositionthroughoutthetask6presentsarelevantpositionalthoughtheconclusionsmaybecomeunclearorrepetitiveExtendandsupportmainideas7presents,extends

2、andsupportsmainideas,buttheremaybeatendencytoovergeneraliseand/orsupportingideasmaylackfocusCC5.5Paragraph6usesparagraphing,butnotalwayslogicallyLogicalorganizationofessay6arrangesinformationandideascoherentlyandthereisaclearoverallprogressionCohesivedevices5makesinadequ

3、ate,inaccurateorover-useofcohesivedevicesLR7.0Range7usesasufficientrangeofvocabularytoallowsomeflexibilityandprecisionAccuracy7mayproduceoccasionalerrorsinwordchoice,spellingand/orwordformationGRA7.0GrammaticalRange7usesavarietyofcomplexstructuresAccuracyofgrammar7hasgoo

4、dcontrolofgrammarandpunctuationbutmaymakeafewerrorsScore（四项所得分）25.5/6.5OtherItemsAffectingScore（扣分项）UnderlengthxNo.ofwords285Penalty0.0Off-topicxMemorized——Illegible——OverallBandScore(最终分数)6.5=6.5–0.0外教一对一淘宝店：英语同桌EnglishPartner雅思作文修改老师的批改使用了word的备注,请务必用PC端看,请勿使用<预览>/手机/平

5、板.bandrangebandrange9[35-36]4[15-17)8.5[33-35)3.5[13-15)8[31-33)3[11-13)7.5[29-31)2.5[9-11)7[27-29)2[7-9)6.5[25-27)1.5[5-7)6[23-25)1[3-5)5.5[21-23)0.5[1-3)5[19-21)0[0-1)4.5[17-19)————外教一对一淘宝店：英语同桌EnglishPartner雅思作文修改Question:Somepeoplebelievethatchildrenshouldbeallowedto

6、stayathomeandplayuntiltheyaresixorsevenyearsold.Othersbelievethatitisimportantforyoungchildrentogotoschoolassoonaspossible.Whatdoyouthinkaretheadvantagesofattendingschoolfromayoungage?Analysis:QuestiontypeDiscussionTopicSomepeoplebelievethatchildrenshouldbeallowedtostaya

7、thomeandplayuntiltheyaresixorsevenyearsold.Othersbelievethatitisimportantforyoungchildrentogotoschoolassoonaspossible.Realwritingtasks1.Discusswhysomepeoplebelievethatchildrenshouldbeallowedtostayathomeandplayuntiltheyaresixorsevenyearsold.2.Discusswhyothersbelievethatit

8、isimportantforyoungchildrentogotoschoolassoonaspossible.3.Discusstheadvantagesofattendingschoolfromayou