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1、【范文一】Recentlymanyuniversitystudentslaunchspontaneousdonationsforhelpingclassmatessufferingfromseriousillnessesorvictimsindisasters.Alongwiththebehaviorofdonating,thedonationamounthasbecomeacontroversialtopic.Someevenholdtheopinionthattheamountisastandardformeasuringlove.Themoreamountsar
2、edonated,themorehelptheneededcanget.Isupportthatdonationfortheneededisakindofbehaviorwhichshowskindgiving,unselfishandpricelessdevotion,benefitinginimprovinginterpersonalrelationshipandbuildingupaharmonioussociety.Whatmattersalotisnothowmuchmoneyisdonated,butthecareandsupporthiddenbehin
3、d.Allinall,thebehaviorofdonationitselfshouldbeencouraged,butitshouldn’tbecomeacompetition.Themoneydonatedcannotbeequatedwiththeloveandthemeaninghidden.Everypennyisanexpressionoflove.【点评】文章首段引出要讨论的话题—--大学生捐款现象，并引出由这一现象衍生出的人们对捐款金额的争议，甚至有的人认为捐款数目越多，需要获得帮助人受益越多。第二段提出自己对捐款一事的看法---捐款是一种行善积德，无
4、私奉献，大公无私的行为，有助于改善人际关系，创建和谐社会。最后一段进行归纳总结，说明应该鼓励捐款这一行为，但不应该将捐款视为一种“金钱”的竞争，无论捐多捐少，每一分每一厘都意义深重。第一段中launchspontaneousdonations表示“发起自发捐款”，后面for接的是捐款救助的对象；第二段中improvinginterpersonalrelationship表示“改善人际关系”，buildingupaharmonioussociety表示“创建和谐社会”；第三段中的cannotbeequatedwith表示“与……相提并论”。【范文二】Internetha
5、spenetratedintoallaspectsofourlifeandwork.OntheInternet,wecandoanythinganywhereanytime,huntingjobs,chattingwithfriends,shoppingonline,andsoon.Whatstrikesusmostissomestudents,eveninprimaryschools,searchforanswersonInternetwhiledoingtheirhomework.ThemotivesfordependenceonInternetarevariou
6、sandcomplicated,includingreleasingdissatisfactionandangeragainstsocietybyplayingcomputergames,fulfillingself-valuebyindulginginthevirtualworld.Mostofthemarerelatedwiththeirenvironmentofgrowingup.Withoutappropriateguidance,itmaycauseseriousmentalillnessesandbadhabitssuchaslaziness.Inorde
7、rtochangethesituation,governmentsshouldtakemeasurestoenrichpeople’slife,parentsshouldsharemoretimewithchildrenforunderstandingthembetter,andteachersshouldaimtodevelopstudents’self-discipline.Mostimportantly,peopleshouldbeawareoftheharmfulnessofdependingonInternettoomuch.【点评】本题属
