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1、91年作文SectionIHWriting(15points)Directions:A)Title:WHERETOLIVE—INTHECITYORTHECOUNTRY?B)Timelimit:40minutesC)Wordlimit:120-150words(notincludingthegivenopeningsentence)D)YourcompositionshouldbebasedontheOUTLINEbelowandshouldstartwiththegivenopeningsentence
2、.E)YourcompositionmustbewrittenclearlyintheANSWERSHEET.OUTLINEConvertiencesofthecity2.Attractionsofthecountry3.Disadvantagesofboth4.Mypreferenee审题谋篇提纲第一、二项分别要求讨论城市和乡村各自的优点，第三项要求讨论各自的缺点，显然，对照的写作方法最为合适。第四项要求做出自己的选择，这实际上是对前面讨论的一个总结。按照所给提纲，文章自然分成四段。参考范文Manyp
3、eopleappreciatetheconveniencesofthecity.Withsomanysupermarkets,shoppingmallsandrecreationfacilitieswithineasyreach,forexample,citydwellersfinditeasytoenjoythemselves.Also,theyarewell-informedandhaveaccesstobettereducationandbetterjobopportunities.Besides
4、,thecityhasbettertransportationserviceandhealthcare・So,thosewholiveincitiestendtohavebettersenseofsecurity・Butcountrylifeisalsoattractive.Withthefreshair,thegreentreesandthesingingbirds,countrypeopleareclosetonatureandliveaquietlife.Theycanenjoythepeacea
5、ndcalmnessofthepastoralenvironmentthere・Theycaneasilymakefriendswiththewarmheartedandhonestpeoplethere・Boththecountryandthecity,however,havetheirowndisadvantages.Citiesarebeingtorturedbymanyproblems,suchasheavytrafficandseriouspollution.Andurbancitizensa
6、reoftenunderpressure.Asforruralinhabitants,theymayfindlifefarfrombeingconvenient,colorfulorvigorous・AsfarasI'mconcerned,Ihatethehustleandbustleofthecity.Ilikethepeaceandbeautyofthecountry.Astotheinconveniences,countrysideinChinaisundergoinggreatchanges,l
7、eavingmoreandmoredisadvantagesbehind.So,giventhechanee,Iwouldprefertoliveinthecountry.范文点评总体分析：由于从所给材料中较容易确定文章的层次和段落结构，所以，应该在表达上多下功夫。该文借助关联词、独立结构、现在分词作定语、多种句型的应用使得行文流畅。且通过拟人、押韵、渐进（第一段对城市生活优点的列举中，由娱乐，到工作学习机会，最后到与人的生命休戚相关的投庚看病，逐渐形成高潮）的修辞手法使文章形象生动，给人印象深刻。语言
8、亮点：1.withineasyreach："容易得到”。2.haveaccessto：“可以达到，可以使用”。3.Withthefreshair,thegreentreesandthesingingbirds利用对乡村环境的具体描述使人对乡村生活的美如同身临其境。4.thepastoralenvironment：“IB园般的生活坏境5.beingtorturedby："正在遭受…的折磨6.farfrom：“远远达不到…”。7.hustlea
