第一批作文修改总汇

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1、1.Somepeoplethinkthatuniversitiesshouldprovidegraduateswiththeknowledgeandskillsneededintheworkplace.Othersthinkthatthetruefunctionofauniversityshouldbetogiveaccesstoknowledgeforitsownsake,regardlessofwhetherthecourseisusefultoanemployer.What,inyouropinion,shouldbethemainfunctionofa

2、university?Whatshouldbethemainfunctionofauniversityhasbecomeahotdebatedissuenowadays.Peopleholdtwoconverseperspectives.Someofthemassumethatuniversitiesshouldprovidegraduateswiththeskillswhichisareusefultoanemployer.,Whilewhileotherssupportthatthetruefunctionofauniversityshouldbetogi

3、veaccesstoknowledgeforitsownsake.Consideringtheseentirelydifferentviews,intermsofmyself,evensupposingthatskillsaswellasworkingexperenceexperienceareplayingamoreandmoreimportantroleinjob-hunting,studyingandexploringdueacademicknowledgeshouldbethetargetofauniversity.片段句，无主干，建议不要写太长以至错

4、误的句子Otherwise,whatwillbethedifferentsdifferencebetweenauniversityandanindustrialtechnicalschool?Forinstance,astudentmajoringincomputerscienceofanindustrialtechnicalschoolwillbetaughtoftheskillsabouttheusingofcomputersoftwaresorhowtorepairacrashedcomputer.However,auniversitystudentso

5、fthesamemajorwilllearnthemathematicaltheoryofthecomputer,thecomponentsofaCPUandsoon.ButBut不能引导一个整句，应改为Howeverwhenthecollegegraduateswentgojob-hunting,theemployersperhapsdonotneedhisknowledgeofmathematicsorotherprofessionalknowledge,butthesekindsofknowledgegaingivehimaprotentialpoten

6、tialtodomoreflexibleanddifficultworks,andthegraduatesoftheindustrialtechnicalschooldonothavethisability.(Why?需要更多支持)Moreover,theformerstudentwillmaintainalltheskillsthelaterhavehasfromtheworkpracticeinabouthalfayearormore.Thatsuggeststhattheuniversityshouldtaketheresponsibilityofsup

7、plingsupplyingmoretheoreticalknowledge.评分标准具体评语分数任务反应TR没有直接处理题目的要求，并且缺乏足够支持。 5连贯衔接CC逻辑性较差。 5词汇资源LR&语法GRA很多语法及措辞的问题，中式英语普遍，有些影响理解。 5总分G 5建议1.理解题目要求，不能跑题或偏题；2.提高语言的正确性，不要一味写“长难句”。2.Whenacountrydevelopsitstechnology,thetraditionalskillsandwaysoflifedieout.Itispointlesstotryandkeepthema

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